Tuesday, September 1, 2015

Summary Response Outline Bully--(with Maggie Foa)

Summary Response Outline


Summary:
  • Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, main idea-
Bully, directed by Lee Hirsch, portrayed the defiance occurring surrounding the subject of bullying by both the administration and the children because they’re scared of facing the problem
  • Supporting ideas to prove main ideas
Every principle and the majority of kids interviewed, including some victims denied bullying or brushed it off, they said it was not a big deal or that the tormentors were just joking.
  • Explanation of ideas
The fact that the administration of schools and even the victim’s themselves are essentially hiding from the topic of bullying highlights the idea that there is fear in the thought of facing the bullying epidemic.
  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
Principles and kids choose to ignore bullying rather than facing the problem, they are scared to admit that something serious is occurring.  They take the easy way out and deny theres a problem.


Response:
  • Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, agree/disagree (correctly portrays/ incorrectly portrays), because ___________ and ______________
  • Claim 1: Administration, kids, and even some victims deny that bullying is even occurring in schools.
    • Set-up: Teachers, kids, administration, and the school environment as a whole shies away from that fact that bullying is occurring in the school because they are scared of facing the problem, -
    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” (       )
When Alex’s parents questioned Alex about bullying, Alex seemingly defended his tormentors by saying “He’s just messing around with me” (Alex)
    • Explanation of quotation to prove claim- The bully situations that Alex was dealing with were much more drastic than Alex was letting on. The attacks that Alex were facing ranged from getting stabbed with pencils to verbal abuse that established  an isolated environment for Alex. The fact that Alex is embracing these nauseating actions as acceptable demonstrates his own personal denial towards the fact that he is instead being severely bullied.
  • Counterclaim 1: However, .... many schools face the problem of bullying head on by holding assemblies and confronting reported bullies.
    • Set-up Many teachers and principals approached bullies and had discussions with them or made bullies apologize to their victims, proving that they are not afraid of facing the bullying epidemic in their school.
    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” (       )
Alex’s assistant principal confronted one of the bullies, she told Alex, “I talked to him, he never shoved your head under the seat again”
    • Explanation of quotation to prove counterclaim
She was not afraid to confront the bullies that inflicted so much wretchedness on Alex, she talked to them, and the problem that Alex reported never recurred.


  • What are the strengths/ flaws of this argument? Use the rebuttal progression-
A common view is that the bullying epidemic is being exaggerated and is not worth the attention of school boards. This position seems reasonable because not all schools suffer from bullying and there are many kids who have never experienced it at all. While this view sounds plausible at first glance, the more accurate way to think of bullying is to take into account all school districts that are suffering from it. Nearly 400 kids that are victims of bullying commit suicide each year, and this number does not come close to brushing up against the number of students that haven’t committed suicide, but still suffer from severe bullying. Administration and students need to open their eyes and recognize the epidemic that has spread across the country. They need to take a stand against what is costing innocent children their lives, self confidence, and respect for themselves along with respect for the world around them.
  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
Bullying in a prominent problem across school districts in America, and in many ways school environments accept bullying by denying that it occurs. Bully, directed by Lee Hersh interviewed many bullies,  victims, and school personnel. Most all school officials denied the problem of bullying, and some victims even brushed it off as “just joking.” The schools are afraid of facing the bullying and will aggressively avoid the topic of bullying.

1 comment:

  1. Good summary- Make sure to attribute ideas back to Hirsch in your summary. Make sure to remove opinion words.

    Where is your response topic sentence? Good work with your claim and counterclaim, but make sure to cite your quotations correctly (Hirsch). really good work on your rebuttal. Make sure to have a more direct conclusion.

    Proofread for punctuation.

    15/20

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