Saturday, September 12, 2015

REDO PLN--Maggie and Ashley Bully

Summary Response Outline

Summary:
  • Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, main idea-
Bully, directed by Lee Hirsch, portrayed the defiance that occurs surrounding the subject of bullying by both the administration and the children because they’re scared of facing the problem
  • Supporting ideas to prove main ideas
Every principle and the majority of kids interviewed, including some victims denied bullying or brushed it off, they said it was not a big deal or that the tormentors were just joking.
  • Explanation of ideas
The fact that the administration of schools and even the victim’s themselves are essentially hiding from the topic of bullying highlights Hirsch’s suggestion that there is fear in the thought of facing the bullying epidemic.
  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
Principles and kids choose to ignore bullying rather than facing the problem because they are scared to admit that something serious is occurring.  They take the easy way out and deny there’s a problem.

Response:
  • Topic sentence: Bully, directed by Lee Hirsch, highlights the enmity shown by teachers, students, and parents against the idea of facing the bullying epidemic due to their own fears.
  • Claim 1: Administration, kids, and even some victims deny that bullying is even occurring in schools.
    • Set-up: Teachers, kids, administration, and the school environment as a whole shies away from that fact that bullying is occurring in the school because they are scared of facing the problem, -
    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” (       )
When Alex’s parents questioned Alex about bullying, Alex seemingly defended his tormentors by saying “He’s just messing around with me” (Hirsch)
    • Explanation of quotation to prove claim- The bully situations that Alex was dealing with were much more drastic than Alex was letting on. The attacks that Alex were facing ranged from getting stabbed with pencils to verbal abuse that established  an isolated environment for Alex. The fact that Alex is embracing these nauseating actions as acceptable demonstrates his own personal denial towards the fact that he is instead being severely bullied.
  • Counterclaim 1: However, .... many schools face the problem of bullying head on by holding assemblies and confronting reported bullies.
    • Set-up Many teachers and principals approached bullies and had discussions with them or made bullies apologize to their victims, proving that they are not afraid of facing the bullying epidemic in their school.
    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” (       )
Alex’s assistant principal confronted one of the bullies, she told Alex, “I talked to him, he never shoved your head under the seat again” (Hirsch)
    • Explanation of quotation to prove counterclaim
She was not afraid to confront the bullies that inflicted so much wretchedness on Alex, she talked to them, and the problem that Alex reported never recurred.

  • What are the strengths/ flaws of this argument? Use the rebuttal progression-
A common view is that the bullying epidemic is being exaggerated and is not worth the attention of school boards. This position seems reasonable because not all schools suffer from bullying and there are many kids who have never experienced it at all. While this view sounds plausible at first glance, the more accurate way to think of bullying is to take into account all school districts that are suffering from it. Nearly 400 kids that are victims of bullying commit suicide each year, and this number does not come close to brushing up against the number of students that haven’t committed suicide, but still suffer from severe bullying. Administration and students need to open their eyes and recognize the epidemic that has spread across the country. They need to take a stand against what is costing innocent children their lives, self confidence, and respect for themselves along with respect for the world around them.
  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea

Bullying in a prominent problem across school districts in America, and in many ways school environments accept bullying by denying that it occurs. Bully, directed by Lee Hersh interviewed bullies, victims, and school personnel who avoid and deny the serious bullying issue that affect their lives everyday. Hirsch’s point of view relates to the idea that the reason the school board is so sensitive to bullying is due to their own fears of what might happen if the problem does get addressed, and how this fear has an impact on schools and children’s lives around the nation.

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